I love this near future (maybe just current) cult response to our surveillance state. Who knew you could make smashing someone’s face with hammers such a spiritual experience. I believed it, though 😬
Oomf! The choice isn't really a choice is it? The two societies are the same in a way, one is just in its infancy. I would probably rather die. I felt the panic and horror. Well done!
I like how you constructed this whole world around a simple scene of two people talking. The opening pulled me right in. And their conversation felt so natural.
Beatiful. all the context, all the character, the immediacy, the reality that is just out there ahead of us, the threat of the industrial scale ID harvesting and the honest brutality needed to escape the subtle cage thats closing from every angle.
but they leave the teeth...that's a genius touch. 🫡
That was seriously disturbing. I couldn't ever agree to something like that, regardless of what I looked like beforehand. Can't they do plastic surgery but a different sort of initiation ritual?
Wow! The humanity within the brutality, the freedom within the pain…their approach is a visceral nope for me, and at the same time I can understand the philosophy.
I love this near future (maybe just current) cult response to our surveillance state. Who knew you could make smashing someone’s face with hammers such a spiritual experience. I believed it, though 😬
near as in this weekend.
Oomf! The choice isn't really a choice is it? The two societies are the same in a way, one is just in its infancy. I would probably rather die. I felt the panic and horror. Well done!
great insight Jessica, I honestly didn’t realize that they actually parallel each other. thanks for reading!
I am just so suspicious of any and all purity tests. There is such insidious control in all of them.
you will probably survive while the rest of us are smashed with hammers
Some of your finest work! It’s up there with the shoe story for me!
thank you so much!
Brutal!
Not my pretty face. Nope.
back to the border guards with you!
Absolutely brilliant! How very clever!
thank you Wendy
I like how you constructed this whole world around a simple scene of two people talking. The opening pulled me right in. And their conversation felt so natural.
thanks Nick!
Gripping and disturbing from the start to the ending 🫨
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Beatiful. all the context, all the character, the immediacy, the reality that is just out there ahead of us, the threat of the industrial scale ID harvesting and the honest brutality needed to escape the subtle cage thats closing from every angle.
but they leave the teeth...that's a genius touch. 🫡
such a lot in so few words.
well done!
thanks so much Nick!
That was seriously disturbing. I couldn't ever agree to something like that, regardless of what I looked like beforehand. Can't they do plastic surgery but a different sort of initiation ritual?
Brilliantly written, though... made me shiver.
thank you! i don’t think I could either!
Wow! The humanity within the brutality, the freedom within the pain…their approach is a visceral nope for me, and at the same time I can understand the philosophy.
thank you Liz!
fantastic.