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This is an addictive beginning! You did a great job of keeping the tension crazy high. I’m so sad for her family!

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Phenomenal opening. The escalation in this was perfect, especially from claire's perspective; starting off with things she didn't even notice like the cell phones, then jumping right to facing down gunbarrels. You started the momentum and never let up. Looking forward to part 2.

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OMG, this made me so sad that she couldn’t get to her family! But I was happy that Oscar got back to her

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much more to come

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