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Joseph L. Wiess's avatar

I could hear the drum beats down into the marrow of my bones.

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Bette Perkins's avatar

So dark , so sensual, I could feel Naomi turn to Red, way too high and swept into that creepy seductive gray dancing mass of bodies— a very intoxicating read!!! SO CREEPY

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Sean Thomas McDonnell's avatar

Excellent. I felt like I was walking beside Red the entire time.

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Really excellent, such a unique feel to it. I'm imagining a David Lynch version of this tale, the music becoming more pervasive and crushing as it develops.

Thinking also of PiL "Death Disco"

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bwhQ2gsYgXM

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EJ Trask's avatar

thank you! it is available for mr lynch to purchase.

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Liz Zimmers's avatar

I loved this so much! This story touched the basement floor and was so graceful and darkly beautiful on the descent.

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EJ Trask's avatar

thank you Liz, that means so much coming from

you

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Carolyn Bedgood's avatar

I stopped at one point to breathe in and out deeply, just to make sure I still could. So vivid, so good!

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EJ Trask's avatar

oh that’s a great compliment, thank you!!!

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Kiana Alejandra's avatar

this was so good!

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EJ Trask's avatar

thank you!

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